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Question: Please critique my poem (it is a dark poem so plz don't read if you have a problem with dark poetry)!?
Destiny
callous words fill my brain
slowly, surely driving me insane
ripping, tearing making me bleed
sucking strength i desperately need
poisoning blood left in my veins
killing the sense that still remains
shredding my will steadily apart
draining the love right out my heart
shattering parts of inside my head
murdering the words i've never said
filling my mind and soul with hate
dealing the cards of my cruel fateWww@QuestionHome@Com
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wow! that was amazing, you have great talent for poetry (from what i just read at least) i love it!
But, poetry can be ANYTHING!. It could be something stupid like Roses are red violets are blue i like sugar how bout you!? but it's still a poem!. Yours is all yours, not someone elses, you wrote down what you were feeling or doing and put it to paper!. That's the best poetry out there!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Loved it!.!. really deep and soulful, personal and beautiful!.
You're expressing who you really are when you write this way!. There're nothing wrong with doing that! =DWww@QuestionHome@Com
id say its quite good, its sounds pretty honest not the way some stuff trys to sound a certain way!. good flow, although i kind of like ababab as apposed to aabbaabb as a rhyming styleWww@QuestionHome@Com
poetry comes from within!.!.!. they are the words and feelings of the author!.!.!. no one should have a problem with it!.!.!. I think it's great!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
OMG THAT IZ RILLY GOOD!ONE OF MY POEMZ WAZ IN THE BOOK OF ANTHOLOGY OF POETRY OF YOUNG AMERICANS!. FROM MY POINT OF VIEW IT LOOKS LIKE U SHOULD SEND IT TO A PUBLISHING COMPANY IT IZ THAT GOOOOOOOOOD!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I would probably give it a 7 out of 10!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
its greatWww@QuestionHome@Com