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Question: Please critique my poem (it is a dark poem so plz don't read if you have a problem with dark poetry)!?
Destiny

callous words fill my brain
slowly, surely driving me insane

ripping, tearing making me bleed
sucking strength i desperately need

poisoning blood left in my veins
killing the sense that still remains

shredding my will steadily apart
draining the love right out my heart

shattering parts of inside my head
murdering the words i've never said

filling my mind and soul with hate
dealing the cards of my cruel fateWww@QuestionHome@Com


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wow! that was amazing, you have great talent for poetry (from what i just read at least) i love it!

But, poetry can be ANYTHING!. It could be something stupid like Roses are red violets are blue i like sugar how bout you!? but it's still a poem!. Yours is all yours, not someone elses, you wrote down what you were feeling or doing and put it to paper!. That's the best poetry out there!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Loved it!.!. really deep and soulful, personal and beautiful!.
You're expressing who you really are when you write this way!. There're nothing wrong with doing that! =DWww@QuestionHome@Com

id say its quite good, its sounds pretty honest not the way some stuff trys to sound a certain way!. good flow, although i kind of like ababab as apposed to aabbaabb as a rhyming styleWww@QuestionHome@Com

poetry comes from within!.!.!. they are the words and feelings of the author!.!.!. no one should have a problem with it!.!.!. I think it's great!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

OMG THAT IZ RILLY GOOD!ONE OF MY POEMZ WAZ IN THE BOOK OF ANTHOLOGY OF POETRY OF YOUNG AMERICANS!. FROM MY POINT OF VIEW IT LOOKS LIKE U SHOULD SEND IT TO A PUBLISHING COMPANY IT IZ THAT GOOOOOOOOOD!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I would probably give it a 7 out of 10!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its greatWww@QuestionHome@Com