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Question: Will you look here!?

so I'm looking at the pictures of my yearbook
I see ppl looking like a crook
they try to smile nicely, but that's just in a book
in real life I realized, they have their own groups
& I'm like a stranger & don't fit in in their troops
I tried & now I'm tired
why try again, why bother my mind
so you see, this world doesn't matter to me
I'm always tired
but no matter what I do,
I'll never be inspired!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

You have tried to rhyme at the expense of beautiful meanings!.You feel sad and depressed!.Large hearts and spirits always do!.Try again and bother your mind and let the world matter to you!.Your words are charged with charming meanings from your heart and your poetic images are touching!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's not bad and can be pretty good if you'll take the time to edit it, correct misspelled words and drop the abbreviations!.

Still, it's not bad for an early effort!. Keep writing!. You have enough natural talent to get much better!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its goodWww@QuestionHome@Com