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Question: Do you like this poem!? What should be the title!?
Do you like the poem I write!? What do I need to work on to make it better!? What should be the title of this poem!?

Through life I roam
unhappy, unloved,
scared and alone,
week and cold,
lest aside
and broken inside,
without a place
to call a home

I'm hungry for love
yearning to find
someone who cares,
someone to hug!.
Still nobody's there
just and empty hole!.

I keep going on
my journey to nowhere
walking through
an empty road,
living with
a broken soul!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
it's "weak" (line 4)
"an" instead of "and" (last line in second stanza)

And I would call it "Lonely Wanderings"
Sounds sad, I hope things look up for you in good time!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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a blue space!.!.!.!.!.

something lucking in your poem!.!.!. there is no passion in it!.!.!. add a little passion and you will hit the core!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Some spelling mistakes but the poem is good!Www@QuestionHome@Com

great poem! very intriguing!. A good title would be "A Broken Soul"Www@QuestionHome@Com