Another dark poem ?

Question: Another dark poem !?

God and Jesus say suicide
Is a sin
Someone dark
From hell
Plays beguiled lynch pin
Whispering dark thoughts
In someone’s ear!?
The devils waiting in the corner
Laughing as a wild reviled
Child
As someone contemplates
Deep within
Will she trade-in a life
For a lambskin!?
To jump from the Jaws of Life
Forgetting her family
Next of kin !?
Weighing in If she does the deed
Her family will reel
In pain, from this terrible sin !?Www@QuestionHome@Com

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I like this poem mostly because it is a dark poem!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

terrible poem

lacks consistency and no iambic measures

the flow is horribleWww@QuestionHome@Com

the ideas and where it's going is good

just needs a little work on the clarity of this :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

ya its dark poem not bad poemWww@QuestionHome@Com