A poem youd care to rate?

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Question:

i added some stuff and changed some words so please rate

Sitting on my front steps
Thinking of you
Watching the sunset
Go out of view

Now that its gone
There’s nothing in sight
The days long
Turns into night

And we look
At the same night sky
Hoping, maybe
The sun will not rise

So we don’t have to spend
Another day apart
We are not friends
Since you broke my heart

But I can find
Underneath the secrets
The old past times
That I don’t regret

But I know I’m on your mind
And I’m doing fine
I just seem to find
That your also on mine

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

This would be a 9 + 1
however you did a magnificent job on this poem
You are going through alot of pain
from someone who broke your heart
Another day has gone
We are not friends
that has ended
I sensed she kept some things secrets
that damaged the friendship
You will always think of her and she will always think of youWww@QuestionHome@Com

it sounds like a song
i would give it a six!. the rhyming is a little basic but good, but i think stanzas 2 3 and 5 need work

please rate mine as well! its nearbyWww@QuestionHome@Com

10+
its sad u are not even friendsWww@QuestionHome@Com