Do you like this(quite short)?

Question: Do you like this(quite short)!?

The midnights maiden
has left,yet again
fresh honey dew kisses
bejeweling your parted
red lips with a morning star
You are my rose;

I am the earth!.
Through my interlaced
green eyelashes,the grass stalks
I see your blilliant iridiscence
under morns early beamsWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

thats amazingWww@QuestionHome@Com

get rid of saying the eyelashes are grass stalk (explaining it)
and the rose part and i am the earth part, try to find another way to describe you as the earth in a less obvious wayWww@QuestionHome@Com

Very deep!. Very Nice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com