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Position:Home>Poetry> Need help with my poem?Question: Need help with my poem!? anyways im up at 4 AM dunno why and decided to write a poem!. But it only ended up to be less than 6 lines!. So its possible the shortest poem you will ever read, if you can call it that!. Can you help add more lines!. (i cant get past cries of mother earth)
Swiftly the sound, Carries through the wind!. I hear it call to me, I hear it sing to me!. The cries of mother earth!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Hi - Beautiful beginning, I altered the wording just a teency bit!. I realize this may not have been at all the direction you were looking to take the poem, but somehow this is how it came out!. I write allot of poetry, specifically spoken word, so if you want to really get the full impact of the rhymes and rhythms etc, read it aloud!. I don't know how much experience you have reading spoken word!.!.!.just remember that you don't have to stop at the end of every line, try reading it by following through on the punctuation!.!. I hope you enjoy it and if not, I can only hope that someone out there does!. Swiftly the sound Is carried on the wind!. At one time it would sing to me!. But now I hear it call to me, The cries of Mother Earth, The anguish of her tortured voice Cuts through the city chatter!. Through the clatter of metallic parts, Of traffic whizzing, whirring, Motors purring, I hear Rushing past my ears Sweet Mother Earth's lament For all her treasure, now seen spent And squandered!. My mind wanders through the words Unheard by all the world Unheeded by the media Who push their products on the masses Leaving bruises, gouging out a place On Mother Earth fast ageing face!. Our waste returns to dirt and taints That once sweet sound of melody, Of Mother Earth's once resounding voice That once sang out to me, And now calls out in pain to me, That blows so swiftly on the wind!.Www@QuestionHome@Com The cries of mother earth still pounding in my ears, as if it were my own heart, yet I felt no fear, Sun dances on a Brooke that rushes by This not good but the only thing that comes to my mind maybe you can use some of it or maybe it will help give you more ideas Good Luck it was fun!Www@QuestionHome@Com Swiftly the sound, Carries through the wind!. I hear it call to me, I hear it sing to me!. The cries of mother earth!. are daunting to me i sing upon a hill as mother natures cries to me the sounds are so sweet ther are fatal to me ow how i long for mother nature to be meWww@QuestionHome@Com Swiftly the sound, Carries through the wind!. I hear it call to me, I hear it sing to me!. The cries of mother earth!. Calling me from eternity To embrace her love And give all that!.!. Which she has stored in me I release my fruit, I am her treeWww@QuestionHome@Com |