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Question: POEM GRaDE!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?
Grade this poem please change words if u see something is wrong with sentence
oh and grammar it and force check it!.!.!.
I was walking , I was listening
I was feeling the cold air and the love surrounding me
When the air was blowing, someone was appearing
Her beautiful hair was flowing
She was looking at me with a beautiful smile
She has a golden-heart that shall never break
This is my beautiful sister that God has given me
I shall never untie the knot but to keep it with me foreverWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Ok!.!.!.um!.!.!. this sounds like you're having a very inappropriate relationship with your sister!.
First stanza!.!.!. good!. Parallel structure is always a good choice!.
Second stanza!.!.!. ok!. Random rhyme, probably an accident, although not really a bad thing!.
Third stanza!.!.!. doesn't make a lot of sense!. It sets the poem up to be a love poem!. It's clear that the speaker admires the girl!. Try "!.!.!.beautiful smile/ From a golden-heart!.!.!."
Fourth stanza!.!.!. makes the reader go "huh!?" This is not the kind of poem you write about a sister!. It sounds like you are in love with your sister and will never let her be with anyone else!. I don't know how you can fix this!. But it should be "!.!.!.sister who God!.!.!."
Overall grade, based on poetic convention, B!. Based on content and clearness of ideas, D!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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