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This is my assignment!. I had to take lines from other poems to create my own poem!. I need to know if my poem has a connotatively loaded line!.http://cte!.jhu!.edu/techacademy/web/2000/!.!.!.
and this is my poem-

Purposely Trapped

I sit alone
In the thunder cloud
Apart from the world
Thinking of emptiness
Ghosts welcome my heart
I don’t care!.

From the wound pours tears
The days of sadness
Are never lost
The memories, an illusion
Why aren’t you dead!?
I’ve been in darkness so long!.

From the crazy side of mind
I breathe in so hard
Surely it’s a start
I close my eyes so tight
Waiting for the light
The time is right!.

The bad thing is
I never wanted anything!.
Stop the words now!.
I am losing my mind!.
It isn’t easy with hope!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
the line with "ghost" could be considered as connotative!. It's one that might have a secondary meaning, aside from what's obvious!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

yeaahh hun its pretty good
i agree with the fist comment
take out the i don't care part!.!.
it um doesn't makes sense :)
and you should probably put in

I sit alone
In the thunder cloud
Apart from the world
Thinking of emptiness
Ghosts welcome my heart
I start to fear

From the wound pours tears !.!.!.!.!.!.!. ect !.Www@QuestionHome@Com

that is good you may want to take out I don't care after the ghost part

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