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Question: This is a reworking of a poem that I pared from 6 syllables per line to 4 per line!. How is it now!.!?
"thirteen years 2"


Reflections lie,
the mirror knows!.
Yesterdays past,
tomorrow's gone!.

Thirteen years old,
promises died!.
You see my rage,
you see me cry!.

You're straight from hell,
a mournful scream!.
Scripts been written,
now take the fall!.

No more rainbows,
words I desire!.
For the chosen,
never knew why!.

Know what I see!?
the voice, the veil!.
Know where I stand!?
never know why!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Ya baby, I really liked this a lot <3

Pen on DP!Www@QuestionHome@Com

great, very insightful!.!. very comprehensive and direct!.!.!.!. the emotion, and anger stands out like a sore thumb!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

One word, Wow!.Www@QuestionHome@Com