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Question: A poem that rhymes!. Older, but reworked!. Is it a good "rhyming" poem!.!?
"the hood"
Deep within the bowels of night,
I walk alone, no fear, no fright!.
Breathing deep the frosty air,
I'm walking briskly to my lair!.!.
Suddenly a shot rings out,
then another, this one stout!.
Dodging round a building square,
now I'm caught, no where to dare!.
Walking through the hood at night,
damn this darkness, lack of sight!.
Bangers hangin' here and there,
home is way across the square!.
Dodging this way and then that,
hanging here, just like a bat!.
As I see the edge of land,
on my back I feel a hand!.
Spun around to see the face,
just a kid no need for mace!.
Just another night in the hood,
made it home, i knew I would!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like it!!! Tempo's good, I know that is a musical term, but it's got tempo and rhythm!. Like it! What more can I say!? There is nothing you should change about it!. It tells the story, it is meaningful and it has great rhyme! I have read it three or four more times!. It is great! I love it!! You surprised me!. Want to hear more of these!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Wonderful insightful writing my friend *^_^*Www@QuestionHome@Com
That's an interesting piece of work!. Keep it up!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Makes me think of a book i read!. Can't recall the name though!. hmph!. It was good, really good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I liked that, I kind of felt that way through highschool!.!.!.very good, you are talented!. keep up the good workWww@QuestionHome@Com