10 pts...is my poem cliche?

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Question:

I write occasional poetry, and it seems like recently what I write reads like cliches!.!.!.

Dear Tricia,

Today my hair are gray,
Musing about yesteryear,
Perchance on this day
hoping you'd appear!.

Now looking back today,
If I ever had a choice,
With you there I'd stay
only to hear that voice!.

I grin, and then remember
How your smile glowed,
Seeming to last forever,
that summer, years ago!.

Past seasons have gone,
With it, we'd changed
there it all went wrong
and emotions waned!.

We were naive and young
You couldn't wait forever,
Not biting your tongue,
We couldn't be together!.

With you were the best
moments of my life!.
Watching our night set
it hurt to say goodbye!.

Now nights seem so long
thinking about you here
when I hear that song,
Wishing you were near!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Its not really "cliche"
your poem(s) only seem cliche to you because most poems are love poems with a common human experience!.!.!.
Really good poem!.!.!.check your spelling other than that don't change a wordWww@QuestionHome@Com

That is beautiful and filled with emotional and longing for someone that will never come again!. I actually felt sorrow for the loss!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Your poem made me remember my experience of losing a loved one!. I think you put the emotions of it into words in a good way!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

whether or not your poem is cliche is the least of your worries, in due time you will knowWww@QuestionHome@Com

fix the typo and your poem would be all the more better!.
Good job
I can see someone reading this to their lover at a coffee house!. =]Www@QuestionHome@Com

I would re-work the first stanza!. It's a little clunky!. Other that that, I think it's nice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com