A poem....?

Question: A poem!.!.!.!.!?

I am sitting here
Thinking of you
But only to me
Does it just take a few

Glances and thoughts
To get me charmed
You don’t cause strife
You don’t cause harm

You just cause
My mind to blank
And for me
To stop and think

Of how you look
So great today
A bunch of things
I’d never say

what do you think of this poem!?

rate please its not edited or final but i just wrote it!.!.!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

It's OK, It has rhyme but it feels like you want to say something more but were too worried about rhyming than about the message!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it's really good!.

i'd give it a 7!.

i think you should try to be more descriptive!. use more figurative language!. like more details!.
like when you talk about how "you" look!. talk about what they look like!.

i mean, i'm no pro!. but i think it's good, just could use a few tweaks :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Poetry is a piece of your heart and soul and there is no greater gift than that! It cannot be rated as you would rate a movie or a restaurant!. The opinions of others matter very little!. It is how YOU feel, how YOU felt when you wrote it!. I will not rate your poem but I give YOU a 10!Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is a great poem!.!.!. I'd give it a 8!.5!. Only because it does feel like you want to say more!. Poetry doesn't have to rhyme,,,, try to step out of the box and not write in PROSE so much!.

a famous poet said !.!.!.!.be descriptive "!.!.!.!.write for that stranger in the audience that does not speak of your native tongue centuries from now"!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yeah its not too bad, id say about a 4 though, you really got to try and pput a bit more emotion into it, and instead of working so hard on words to rhyme, think of a basic structure, then get the words to rhyme later onWww@QuestionHome@Com

id give it an 8 only because it feels a little unpolished!. Poetry is a great way to release your feelings, but the person they are about would be very happy to hear it!. More then any of the people here, I'm sure!. It shows you are thinking about them!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

4

Its cliche and there are no literally devices!.

Read this love poem by Williams Wordsworth titled: She Dwelt Among Untrodden Ways!.

"A violet by a mossy tone
Half hidden from the eye!
-- Fair as a star, when only one
Is shining in the sky!."Www@QuestionHome@Com

Okay you stink at writing poems if you want a good poem then try this

Today I looked
at you and i
thought what
a beautiful woman
how lucky i must beWww@QuestionHome@Com

Aw, how sweet!. For a girl!?
Rather, it's a bit simple for an english assignment, but it's quite adorable!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

10
its beautiful !Www@QuestionHome@Com

i would say its a 6 its good jazz it up a bit tho make it sexyy like when i see u u blow my mind i love the way u hair looks!.!.your eyesand ur behind ;)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Beautiful poem!!! dedicate it to a girl, ull swipe her off her feet!!!!oh, i rate it a 12!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

aww that's real sweet!. i give it a 10!.

although the spacing was a little awkward, but what gives that's real nice =]Www@QuestionHome@Com

9 its greatWww@QuestionHome@Com

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9!?10 very goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

I think it's great=)

I give it a 9 1/2

good job!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i'll give it an 8 its not bad id be more creative more metaphors, analogies, things like thatWww@QuestionHome@Com

7!.

Honestly it has potential, keep going don't stop there!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i think its sweet!. i like it!. about an 8 maybe!? =D its good!.!. keep it goinWww@QuestionHome@Com

A five !!!
Looks good !.

Your choice of words seem to be quite less, Keep reading to improve your vocabulary!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

10
i like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i would say 8!.9Www@QuestionHome@Com

WHOA! I give it an 8!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I'd say 8!. Its pretty nice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com