A Good Night Poem ... Care to comment?

Question: A Good Night Poem !.!.!. Care to comment!?

"Sleep with me"

Sleep
With me
Hold me tight
Don’t let me go
‘Til the morning light
Cradle me in your care
Your whispers sweet in my ear
Tender lips brush gently, I sigh!.!.!.
I feel your body pressed against my thigh
Time stands still for us just once!.!.!.Sleep with me!.!.!.

TemariWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Alone!.!.!.!.!.!.!.as I lie awake!.!.!.!.!.!.in my bed
Longing for the warmth of your body
Remembering how your skin feels
Desperately needing your touch
Awaiting!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.your soft lips
Filled with such passion
Pressed against mine
In my arms
Now I
DreamWww@QuestionHome@Com

Sleep
with me
like it was
our very last night!.
Kiss my eyelids, soft lips,
like it was your last time
to feel the silk of my skin
and my sleepy, heavy eyelids gently brush you!.
In the morning be grateful that I'm still here,
Naked and fast asleep, dot in your questions, and clear!.

I liked your poem, but unfortunately it was written to a man from a woman!. It's so unnatural!. :D :D
Sorry Shaun : PWww@QuestionHome@Com

Um, er, Shay yoo hoo! I don't mean to be rude but there won't be room in the bed if we ALL accept!
(Just a simple observation now)

It even works upside down you know!
(I won't delete this comment but I can see where some people would)

Seriously this is beautiful! :-)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Amazing work!. I like the way the poem's lines grow in length to create a pleasing visual effect that works well in conjunction with the calming mood that is set by the actual words!.
Great job! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I am
in Love
with you Temari!.
Yes, I will sleep with you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Who could refuse such a wonderful, and wonderfully written invitation!? I gotta tell ya though!.!.!.!. I snore!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very good!. Keep up the good work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Awwww this is so sweet!. I love it!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

the mood is very relaxing i think people would like this alotWww@QuestionHome@Com

HAHA i LOVE iT!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is very well done, my compliments!.Www@QuestionHome@Com