Do you like my poem on WAR?

Question: Do you like my poem on WAR!?

I CAN FEEL THE DRUMS BEAT
I can feel the drums beat,
As I march through muddy sod!.
I can hear the music play,
While through the jungle we trod!.
It sings of honor and unity!.
It reminds us not to yield!.
So we march on through the rain
That covers the battlefield!.
With my gun I feel protected,
But I know in the very end,
The one whom I can rely on
Is my fellow soldier – and friend!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

mehWww@QuestionHome@Com

I like your poem!.!.!. I have an understanding of the calm that a weapon might provide on a battlefield!. Something like carrying the eye of a storm!. Until you need it, and everything in between guns is soon to become more like the eye of the storm!.
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The gun is like a vehicle for a soldier!.!.!.
he moves with it's presence in mind!.
Fueled with bullets!.!.!.
Next to friends with theirs at your side!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

eh!.!.!. i like it except for the 'feeling protected' part!. On a battlefield, i would imagine that everyone is feeling extremely vulnerable!. especially in the jungle with snipers and crap!. but other than that, the part about relying on friends is pretty good!. a pretty decent poem!. good work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Actually, it inspired me enough to write a war poem also!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

you have to change the title!.!.!.
coz it didn't attract my attention!.!.!.

well!.!.!.!.to be able to attract more readers the title must be an "eye-catcher"!.!.!.good luck^_^Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow its good
nice poemWww@QuestionHome@Com

i like itWww@QuestionHome@Com

PRETTY GOODWww@QuestionHome@Com