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Question: Yo is this poem good!?
Her smile, her face her eyes!. All gone!.
Her laugh, her heart, her humor, her brain!. All gone!.
Valentines Day and it is all gone!.
I have money!. Everything else is all gone!.
Love or money!? If you pick money it's all gone!.
Don't mess up your life!. Don't make her leave!.
Make the choice that will keep her there: Love!.
Once she's gone, she's not coming back!. She's gone for good!.
Don't try to apologize if you don't mean it!.
She won't listen!. She's already too far gone!.
Don't say you changed your mind!.
That should never have been an issue!.
You should have picked love to start with!. Now she's gone!.
Don't give her drugs or money from drugs!.
She'll just give them away, and then they'll be gone too!.
Don't use another girl to make her jealous!.
Even if you do, she's gone and she's not coming back!.
You'll just lose another girl and that'll make 2!.
They'll both be gone and then you'll have nothing!.
Everything's gone, but money and drugs!.
She's gone and she's not coming back!. You messed up your life and it's all gone!.
You made your choice and you chose wrong!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
The concept of it is very good, but I would say work on the rhythm and flow of it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I love the poem, but at the end, the very end, you could put
"And now she's gone!." But that is just my opinion!. But I do love it!.
And for a name, you could call it "Gone!."Www@QuestionHome@Com
That's really amazing! You know, you can get that published!.!.!. :]
P!.S!. AWESOME JOB!
very deep poem :]Www@QuestionHome@Com
i dont like it i love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
metaphors, more figurative languageWww@QuestionHome@Com
yah hhahehahahaWww@QuestionHome@Com
it's good, but try to use more symbolism!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
its okay, but i can't really understand it!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I think it's really cool!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Yes, GREAT!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Good money
this is very nice!
Money comes and goes love doesn't!Www@QuestionHome@Com
yes!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
amazing ! did you write it !?Www@QuestionHome@Com
It sux!.!.srr :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
i like it! its pretty good!Www@QuestionHome@Com
lol yea it good:]]Www@QuestionHome@Com