Would you think this is a good free verse poem??

Question: Would you think this is a good free verse poem!?!?

Oh
How dark is my day
I’ve worked hard
I’m tired
The rain
Gives me the feel
Of
A calm sea
Only one thing
Can make my day,
Talking to
That someone
Then all of the sudden
I forget
About everything
That
Surrounds me

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

This poem has all the classic elements!. I am a big fan of free verse and this is one of the best i have read for a while!. It's bleakness is stark at the beginning!. The rain reminds me of the tears of the world!. The tears become the sea, but there is reconciliation at the end!. Just talking to someone makes me forget about everything that surrounds me!.

You are very very talented!. Please post some more as i love to read them!. Well done i'm a fan!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

really this doesn't read like a poem to me sorry!. it just seems more like you just told me about your day!.Www@QuestionHome@Com