Please review what I have written!? Many Thanks!.!?
It's poetic prose - but please read it - I'd be grateful!.
And what, in your opinion, is the theme!?
Many Thanks:
Sweat, tears of blood
In it they dip
Cruel hands so black
Scars!
From the crack of an unforgiving whip
Back hunched from years of servitude
Heart broken
A life of solitude
My cry of anguish
Blocked in the throat
The throat so dry
'You cannot dream – you cannot wish!'
'Why!?' I cry
'Because you are
'just simply Jewish!'
'This is your destiny
'To serve Egypt faithfully
'And me…'
Civilisation
A word to lift your heart
And to break your back
As you like me, lift up the sack
Of straw
Of mud
Of water and more
An empire stretched
On every brick, my name, in blood
Is etched
'This is your destiny
'To serve Egypt faithfully!.'
Suddenly –
I realise: Egypt is not Pharaoh
'But Egypt is me!'
The whips crack, 'Blasphemy!'
The whole world is on my back
'Comrade!' calls a soothing voice
'The future's not so black!'Www@QuestionHome@Com