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Question: A poem!.!.!. expressing my thoughts!.!.!. like it!?
Murder in crazy thoughts!.!.!. naww, I'm just multi-religious;
I try to chill them out; go to the fridge for some beef cuts!.

Organizing stuff; takes flagrance like I'm Lucky Luciano!.
Bling!? When I'm balling, somebody is singing soprano!.
Sing!? I'd rather pull strings like the insides of a piano!.

Hate comes my way!.!.!. I'm like the Hoover Dam, though;
Twenty-four seconds!.!.!. shot clock;!.
Countdown to somebody's block!.
Keys get turned and open locks!.

Some might say I'm nothing but bad;
Something gangsters wish they'd had!.
Coming!? Eventually, might get to that!.
I've never (seriously) said I was flawless or lawless
Not scared, but cautious!.!.!. I'll be me; call it what you call it!.

I'm the one to get 'em to gather the losing team up!.
Murder In crazy thoughts!? My people bat clean-up!.
Neutral feelings inspired for the government!.!.!. it's what I said!.!.!.
ooh, well!.!.!.I'm tired of it, so many of their people want me dead!.
See; that's honesty for you judgemental motherf--r's headsWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
thats cool bt it doesnt matter of random people on the internet like it you wrote so you shuld be ur only criticWww@QuestionHome@Com

That seems more like a freestyle verse then a poem!. But whatever it is its pretty good!. Id suggest paying more attention to your syllabls so it flows better but you had some good concepts!. Keep practicing you'll get betterWww@QuestionHome@Com

I like the way you use words, very expressive and I think it reads out loud well!.!.!. it is rather dark but I'm sure you intended that!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Hmmm not good at all!!!!!!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com