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Question: Read my poemsz please!?
Swing low Swing high (Ole' i hope my heart dont break)
I Left my heart in a swinging chair
Its sitting calmly just swinging there
there's no savior for its misery
my heart is swinging just for me
where it touch the cloud it catches the moon
whitch tells my heart the storm will be over soon
when it swings down my heart starts to hurt
so my heart stays away from dirt
the swinging chair sometimes breaks
but my heart stays in place
the swinging chair was unwanted unclaime
but my heart still loved it the same
but yesterday i missed my heart to pieces
so i went to the chair which swung my heart to pieces-Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
The poem is beautiful and very calming!. There is just one suggestion though, you should fix the way you spell which and capitalize the I's especially if you are getting it published, which it defiantly has the potential! Great Work!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I think that you need to rewrite the last 4 lines!. They seem mixed up and as if you didnt have any more ideas!.!.
I liked the beginning and then gradually you seem to be working more to rhyme it than to say anything pertenant to your subject!.
It has a good beginning!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Thats so beautiful!. Poetry is an extention of oneself so ou muct be a beautiful person!.Www@QuestionHome@Com