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Question: What do you think of my poem!? (its about a vampire lol)!?
The Death Waltz
I have danced it before
I twirled and curtsied
all across the floor
He held my hand
and one hand on my hip
And then I took
a dangerous dip
Right there in the glass
I saw myself alone
Doing the death waltz
I was the only one skin and bone
His reflection as if translucent
Just a blur of beautiful light
Then I looked back
And I knew I was right
I took my last breath
Before his teeth sunk in
I never really believed
In the walking dead
But now as I saw him
In the last seconds of my life
Doing the death waltz
means no more days after tonight
well i didnt know what to write about so i just wrote about this!. dont be afraid to tell me it sucked!. xP!.!.!.or you can say it was wonderful!! =DWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i think its great!!
maybe put skin and bone on separate lines to make it sound less harsh plus it will rhyme then!!
i really liked itWww@QuestionHome@Com
I liked it!. ^_^ Poetry and vampires, two of my favorite things!. The rhyming ish thing is hard for me so when I find one that isn't all cat, bat, hat I am always intrigued!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Amazing!!! its beautiful!Www@QuestionHome@Com
olo awesomeWww@QuestionHome@Com
I was very good!. I sounded like you put some thought into it!. Nice job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
its good, but the flow needs a little workWww@QuestionHome@Com