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Damned By Desire
I want you near, I want you hear to release me from my pain
As your away, unanswered responses I wander what you have
to gain
Looking into your eyes as you pierce my soul, babe you make
me wander
Hearing your voice as your laughter rings your sincerity I tend
to ponder
As your gentle kiss, your sensual words bore into my mind
I feel your touch, your deepest plunge curious to what you'll
find
The desire I have, the yearning, the lusting for your touch
Your handsome lips, your sexual words I wander should I trust
The burning rage, the anxious passion searing from within
Your's doll I can never be, I know Im only a cut friendWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
As your (you're) away i want you hear (here) to release me from my pain!.
As Your (you're) away, unanswered responses, I wander what you have to gain
Looking into your eyes, as you pierce my soul!. Babe, you make me wander (wonder)!.
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Your handsome lips, your sexual words!. I wander (wonder) should I trust!?
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Your's (Your) doll I can never be, I know I'm only a cut friend!.
It is so much easier to read when you use the correct words!. This also make your point much more clear and demonstrates your mastery of the language and art of poetry!. The actual poem isn't bad, but you really need to work on structure and spelling!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
"Your's" is never right!.
You really need to work on your grammar!. It is confusing to read when you misuse and misspell all these words!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I want you here not hear!.Www@QuestionHome@Com