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Suzy brought a gun to school!. She aimed it right at me
She pulled the trigger and smiled as the bullet hit my knee

I screamed and fell down to the floor as my knee turned bloody red
But all she did was laugh at me as she aimed for my head

My whole thirteen years flashed before me, and I thought back to my friends
The brother that I’d never see!. Is this really the end!?

I cried out in pain and fear!. Afraid of Suzy’s gun
And pained that my life would really end, before it really begun

I never got to graduate or dress up nice for prom
I never got to have a wedding or be a brand new mom

Surely she was joking, Come on Suzy, drop the act
You would never really kill me and I know that’s a fact

I started shaking from the tears and from the agonizing pain
I wanted to do something special I didn’t want to die in vain


Tears fell down Suzy’s face and she, too, dropped to the floor
She tried to hold back her tears, and yelled, “I can’t take this anymore!”

I was already dizzy and didn’t think I saw right
Was this really over!? Had she given up the fight!?

She took her gun in her hands and aimed it at her head
She didn’t wait to pull the trigger and now my friend Suzy’s deadWww@QuestionHome@Com

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