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Question: Rate my poem(1-10) 10 great 1horrible!?
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You took my innocence
And I - retaliated by crying inside!. you didn't care if i felt as if i was dying!.
You never admitted to it, you never cared what you did to me instead you decided to have dared and you were only sorry that you got caught!.you didn't once have a second thought about hurting me!.you didn't care that you were my brother you didn't once care about our mother,and what she thought,you just cared what they had bought, "a lie"you didn't care if I felt full of pain and shame!.you thought it was one of your games!.You raped me there for you there is no escape!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Oh hun,
You need to talk to someone! if you need me I am here for you!Www@QuestionHome@Com
You certainly have some emotional capital invested in this one!. If this happened to you, I'm sorry you had to endure it!. As far as the poem goes, you might start by inserting line breaks to give it some structure and help set up the rhymes you created!. It is not only more difficult to read in its current form, but it looks like a run-on rant!.!.!.which it is not!. This is a poetic narrative, so your lack of images doesn't matter as much, especially because you've used other poetic devices!.
I'd give your poem a 6 in its current form!.!.!.but it could easily be an 8 or 9 if you did a little editing!.
!.!.!.keep writing!.!.!.it will do you good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Shockingly dark!. Incestuous rape is probably not really the subject matter that would appeal to a broad mass of people!. So I would so no I don't like it I think it's inappropriate and actually very weakly constructed, very bad indeed!.
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1!. It is NOT a poem!Www@QuestionHome@Com
wow!.
hey where you raped!?
a random thought came up in my head!.!.
thats a good poem thou!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com