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Question: Name for this poem/what does it mean to you!?
I was thinking E+E but that seems to easy and not interesting!. suggestions please! and what does it mean to you!?

The splash of the creek
flashes of butterflies' wings
unable to speak
as a bird far away sings

the water is clean
the ground untouched
it just seems obscene
to think of this forest corrupt

Two young friends
perched on a branch
left behind by the trends
second home in this ranch

two with nature
they wander so silently
while they can they savour
this natural sanctuary!.

they sit on the tree
seats built for them in particular
branches strong and sturdy
with nothing but beauty to occur

Their friendship is tied
in the branches of the tree
a deep meaningful carving
reading E+E

Just watching the sights
wishing quietly to themselves
sitting at such great heights
on mother nature herself!.

the flies buzz and the creek flows
they cherish the moment, but sadly both knowWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Dear Mystic, This a most lovely poem!!! I would title it:
Beauty of nature: sights,sounds and ending!.
I really love this one!!!!You should submit to a contest or something!. Peace&Love be with you!.!.!.~M~Www@QuestionHome@Com

Call it Goliath, or something pertaining to that!.
Because mother nature is so powerful (IE Goliath), however, she is sometimes so eaisly raped by man (IE David)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I don't know about the name!. I think this is about endearing friendship among the inevitable changes that make us sad!. Maybe the friendship tree!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Eternal!. (name)



means to me, that not even eternity could come between two friendsWww@QuestionHome@Com

That there is 2 friends who carved their initials in a tree!.
About how we keep building things over nature!.
Something simple like!.!.!.
The Tree
Nice work:)Www@QuestionHome@Com

call it "progress"Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow!.!.!. idk, but that is LONG!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

my narture's garden thats what i think when u wrote that!. hope its a good title!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Why not "Two with Nature" since you use the phrase!? Or the two names could be identified in a title like "Emily and Esther" for example!.

You've got some good ideas going here but I think you need to simplify and clarify the poem overall!. What does "trends" as in "left behind by the trends!.!.!." mean!?

Try not to force rhymes like "clean" and "obscene"!. Maybe you could try to rewrite it in blank verse (rhythmic but not rhyming) as an alternative and for some good practice!.

Sorry for the unasked for opinion, but I do hope my words encourage you to write your best!. Keep it up!Www@QuestionHome@Com