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Question: What do you hear in the silence!? A rewrite, pin point please!?
A rewrite caused by a TLC dominant yahoo muse!.


What do you hear
in the silence,
does silence call your name!?

As the bold blazing sun rises at morn,
sunset sinking with golden nuance!.
On the rise of the moon
in a sparkling star lit sky
over ocean's blue at the neap of tide!.

Do you hear the silence!?

Upon a cool spring breeze,
do winds whisper in your ear
while green leafs dance on large old trees!.

Do you hear the frantic flutter flight
of butterflies wings,
The warning buzz of a hungry bee
The labor pains of a bursting bloom
rooted deep in fertile earth!.

Sh-Hush listen to the silence
does it call your name!?Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I love it!. This poem calls my spirit!. What a lovely description of the beauty to be held when one quiets their mind!. Perhaps there is not really such a thing as silence because our beautiful earth and the great cosmos will keep humming along, whether we listen or not!. The sound of silence is the most profound melody, it's up to us just to listen!. You brought me to those majestic (yet familiar) places with you in this poem!. I especially love the line "The labor pains of a bursting bloom, rooted deep in fertile earth"!. Yes, silence calls my name!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

very nice poem!!!
I LIKE IT!!
8 out of 10!
lookin' good!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

!.!.!.!. the hum of existence!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

BEAUTIFUL Jenny! I'd give it a 9-10!.
Gorgeous imagery!Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is very good , but to me perhaps just a tiny bit too heavy with adjectives!. Still a great write :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sweet notes of nature!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

very good! it was awesome!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com