I wanna put my ink on your paper....

Question: I wanna put my ink on your paper!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!?

nah lol just my poem !.!.!.!.!.critique please

She is your pencil but i want to be your pen

I wish we were lovers even though we are just friends!.!.!.

like a pencil one day she will be gone without a trace

but my love for you will never be erased!.!.!.

years from now as you look back on your past

i hope to make an impression forever to last!.

I will be the blue against your white

there for you day and night!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Comparing a love interest to stationary is something I've never seen before!. I can't really decide if I like it or not!.!.!. It's clever, but who really compares a girl to a pencil!?

The second half is quite good!. You have some nice ideas!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I'm pretty hard and harsh, like kif, when it comes to poems of unrequited love!. This one, however, does not suck because you've squeezed in some metaphors!. TDWww@QuestionHome@Com

I got it!. I like it!. Well done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Erotic, I like itWww@QuestionHome@Com

some good stuff now find a way to catergorize it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com