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Question: My poem =)!?
Mask in my hand
to hide the real me
I cant stand
That no one can see
The real guy
behind these lies
the one who just sighs
behind the brown eyes
The one who doesn't know
When to back down
Or the one who wont show
Me behind the frown
Maybe i put on the show
just cause i dont want people to see
I dont want them to know
Me for Me
My mind flies
Am i fun!?
Am i the outgoing guy!?
Or the shy and sensitive one
i was told to fix and add some things to this poem so please rate it!.!.!. and tell me anything to fixWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Great Job! This is suchh a great poem! And I can totally relate to it! :]
umm there's not much I'd change, its so good already!. Just make sure to put punctuation at the end of lines instead of making the entire poem have enjambement (run-on lines)!. Not too much then, just add a couple comma's at places where you'd like a pause (try reading the poem out loud to yourself)!.
But other than that, I don't think you should change anything, its soo good!!
Great Job :]Www@QuestionHome@Com
i Love it!.!.!.!. its amazing! leave it because its amazing!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Very good for a thirteen-year-old!. Just fix a few of the grammatical errors (i!.e!. add an apostrophe to "won't") and it will be great!Www@QuestionHome@Com
It's great, my friend wrote a poem like that for the poetry project!. Ur the age as us too!. LOL who knew there could be so much other people with the similar name!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
2 words--holy crap!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww thats so sweet and sencitive! i say 7/10 because it has some things that u dont realy need there!.Www@QuestionHome@Com