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Question: 10 pts!.!.!.I share my poem, please share your thoughts!?
I am wondering if it needs the last stanza!. It's a weak stanza, and I think the theme has already been established without the fourth stanza!.
Songbird (Bluebird 2)
Her song invites me
here for this day,
In her glances I see
Her emotions sway!.
I've let her free
But she always stays,
My songbird pleases
as I hide love away!.
I've been this sure
she doesn't understand
I am letting her go,
Ignoring feelings and
forgetting about before,
It was never my plan,
Leaving open a window
if she needs a hand!.
She thought soulmates
with the love I bestow,
My songbird hates
me letting her go,
Here secretly I wait
she deserves better,
If it's not too late,
I'll wait for tomorrow!.
Unfolding her eyes
for her to explore,
My songbird please fly
until she is sure,
Now I say goodbye
And then slowly
drying those eyes,
I open the door!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
this poem is the beauty , i love it it really touch my heartWww@QuestionHome@Com
Wow!.!.!.that was very good no matter what you say!.Its better than most of my poems!.Yea,I'm a poet and your really good and if you want a little more insperation then go to poem hunter!.com and sign up and people all over the world can read them and maybe you can read mine!.You sound very insperational!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
it needs the last stanza it closes the whol poem and ends it perfectly that was a very beatiful well done poem!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I think that if you did not add that last stanza the poem would end a little 'weak'!. You need that fourth stanza!. Good job!.
PeaceWww@QuestionHome@Com
Like it even sounds like good song lyricsWww@QuestionHome@Com
Opening her eyes might be best this is a very pretty poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
That was perfect! : D ?Www@QuestionHome@Com
That was good!Www@QuestionHome@Com
its aswome!!Www@QuestionHome@Com