Dark poem ?

Question: Dark poem !?

time creeps up on us all
mysterious and all
waiting for us to fall
as we begin to crawl
from the pram
then waits patiently
when oldness arrives
as our loved ones
pray over us
as we are lowered
into the graveWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Love it!.
From the sublime to the ridiculous:
It's Dark in Here

I am writing these poems
From inside a lion,
And it's rather dark in here!.
So please excuse the handwriting
Which may not be too clear!.
But this afternoon by the lion's cage
I'm afraid I got too near!.
And I'm writing these lines
From inside a lion,
And it's rather dark in here!.

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It's got great possibilities but needs a bit of re-working; for a start it does need a little punctuation!. also, do you need "mysterious and all"!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like it, it reminds me of my early stuff!. Bit too dark for me nowadaysWww@QuestionHome@Com