Poem My pain do you like it.?

Question: Poem My pain do you like it!.!?

When i was so young i remember all the fun' until
one day it went away!.
Hanging with some friends who lost their places again'
and it really is no future at all!.
I was older when i first cried' as the baby died
and have never smiled since!.
Drinking and alone wanting to go home
but there's no home that i can call my own!.
Never will i come to all the love and fun'
as it to had died' with me' so long ago!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

you are!.!.!.!.!.!.
still young !.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
even if you are!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
a few years old!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
look at the far stars!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
the romantic worm moon!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
and the sun sending rays of gold !.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
and you well realize there is a maker!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
and there is a test and there is good and bad!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
if only you realize there is a destination for the innocent!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
same like there is one for the guilty!. trust me you wont be sad !
as for drinking it wont drawn sorrow ,pain or guilty tears!.!.!.!.!.!.
believe me it well float in a pains cup not cheers!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
but if you must !.!. drink with me not alone!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
and take my heart make it home!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
and with a love joy wave!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
on happiness s cost!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
wash away every!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
single drop of!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
your pain
: : 0 )Www@QuestionHome@Com

Really potent and eloquent!. Your intricate manipulation of the various poetic techniques is strong and the way you convey these themes of anguish, depression and dismay were well performed!. Perhaps a general bit of obscurity surrounding the precise reason as to what the persona's grief is related to, but this also could be a reflection of the persona's state of mind!. Perhaps unaccepting or disorientated!. If this was the case then really ingenuous!!
I can intepretated the central idea to be more strongly related to loss!.!.!. Loss of loved ones and loss of perhaps hope and dignity!. You seem to have a minor form of pastiche which is good too!.
Really symbolic and emotive!. It evokes a surge of feelings within the audience and i felt strong sympathy for the persona!.
Take care!!! and great job!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Everyone has known grief that seems to be unbearable!. We need to take what has been given and work toward the future!. The old saying, "never say never" may be ironic, but it's true!. In the past year, I have found a virtual home in poetry!. Find something that can ease your pain; there are still some good things left in this world!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sadly dear, your poem Pain!.
May your life be light again!.

There are loses, there are found!.
Life go up and it came down!.

Too much fun, make you crave,
Too much pain, cause you hate!.

The fire of wisdom will come your way,
and burn these sadness to it's grave!.

this Mighty Torch will show a way!.
a way to a beautiful, peaceful dayWww@QuestionHome@Com

I feel the pain in this poem!. I hope to read in the future a poem that has found love and happiness once again!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's the blues!.!.!. very moving!. I especially like the dying/leaving theme, and the tie between the two "died"s!. Might be reading too much into it here but I did read it again and again!!.!.!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is really awesome and so great!. Keep writing as your getting so damn good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Short, sad, poetic! I like it!.
The last line!.!.!."to" is supposed to be "too"!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

IT'S RELLY GOOD I LOVE IT YOUR A RELLY GOOD WRITER!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Cami,
That's a lovely poem but it's so sad - it makes me want to give you a hug!.
Joe
xxWww@QuestionHome@Com

Its poetic, kind of sad!. But yeah still nice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Aww, its so sad!. Its really good thoughWww@QuestionHome@Com

i really love it
you are getting great
keep it upWww@QuestionHome@Com