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Love!.!.!.!.
Oh! how I cringe at even a whisper
Of the word!.!.!. of that disease
It is but an emotion for those who can feel no other

Why love if you can envy or hate
Why love if the love you yearn
Will end one day

So the next time your eyes
Welt with glinting tears of loving joy
Forgot not how quickly these tears
Can turn to thick, sulphuric tears of heartbrokenness
That burn your eyesWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I really truly love this poem, because it expresses beautifully what just about everyone has felt at some time or another!. Especially by my age, 32!. I know this has nothing to do with your poem, and don't get mad at me! I just want to say you'll one day be writing love poems and meaning every word!. I KNOW you dont believe me now, but its true!. I know these things, I'm cool that way :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like the originality!. Your diction is absolutely spiffy; I adore big words!. However, you may want to find some other words for love!. The repetition takes away from the idea!.
Spectacular poem!
-KatieTheFriggin!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

WOW!. Pretty!.!.!.!.deep!? I like it!.!.!.and it's!.!.!.unfortunately!.!.!.TRUE!! very good job, I'm impressed!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like this!.

It's intreging!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

very nice it rele expresses wut u tryin 2 sayWww@QuestionHome@Com

!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. niceWww@QuestionHome@Com