Position:Home>Poetry> I wrote this poem for my class but i made another i am gonna give this one to a
Question: I wrote this poem for my class but i made another i am gonna give this one to a girl!?
TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK
As I gaze UPON
You’re beautiful FACE
I get this FEALING
I cannot TRACE
You create EMOTIONS
Inside of ME
You give me THAUGHTS
That we should BE
I can only SENCE
The burning LOVE
You feel just LIKE
A gift from ABOVE
You have these LIPS
Words can’t EXPLAIN
If our lips could TOUCH
I would go INSANE
I think of U
Day and NIGHT
When your AROUND
It feels so RIGHT
I get these DREAMS
Of u and ME
I hope 1 DAY
That u could SEE
I have this THING
This feeling for U
I only WISH
U love me TOO
I love u 2 DEATH
I treat u RIGHT
Cause the love we SHARE
Is out of SIGHTWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
dude!.!.!.thats definatly gonna get you laidWww@QuestionHome@Com
This is not bad, but it really needs to be checked for spelling!. You might also want to change the shortforms used (U should be you)!. I also see that the tenses are mixed
I hope 1 day
That u could see
I have this thing
I think "could" should be changed to "can", "u" should be changed to "you", and "1" should be changed to "one"!. Overall it is pretty good, and I think she will probably like it very much!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
You need to spell check it!. Its good, she will totally love it!. I'm 32, a guy I liked when I was 16 wrote me a poem (its not very good) I still have it in a frame though!. Poems written for you alone, are the best poems of all!. You'll make her day!.Www@QuestionHome@Com