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Question: What is your overall opinion of the poem i wrote!?
Originality


Look past the ugly, fat girl I appear to be,
Really look at the inside of me!.
See my thoughts, my opinions, and my beliefs,
See my talents, my humor, see my dreams!.
I’m not just the dork you think I am!.
I have feelings! Can’t you understand!?
I’m not just a statue, I hear what you say!.
When I walk down the hallway, you stand in my way!.

All I did was stand up for myself,
I’m not gonna be like everyone else!.
I’m just not gonna cry in shame,
If you didn’t realize, I have a name!.
I’m not “The girl who talks back”
I’m not “The girl who’s fat”
You don’t have a right to threaten me,
You shouldn’t call me fat, though I appear to be!.
I said “Back off!” What’s the big deal!?
I just didn’t want you to know how I feel!.

Yes, you made me sad, angry too!.
It’s always on, and on about you!.
Why are you so popular, yet so cruel!?
Before I knew it, you were queen of the school!.
I think I know why they pick on me!.
It’s because I’m different, and have originality!.
Yeah, I wear jeans, but they’re not name brand!.
So, I wear makeup!. You think noone else can!.
I’m not afraid to stand out of the crowd!.
Being different makes me proud!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
your a true poet girl that really touched me i think your amazing i give youa 100Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's decent, but kind of simplistic!.
It flows nicely and has a good tempo!.
The topic is a bit overused, but you can expand on it to make it more original!. Add something to make it your own!.
Try spicing up your vocabulary a bit!.
Overall however, it's a touching sediment and a great start!. With a bit of polishing it could be rather stellar!.
The best of luck to you!
-KatieTheFriggin!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Don't know if you're talking about yourself, but if you are, good for you!!! It's so much better to be yourself than care what other people think of you! I like it, it's sort of sad in a way, but I still like it (sort of reminds me how I used to be in high school!.!.!.)Www@QuestionHome@Com

keep on with your live and ignor the jerksa lot of people likes the look of big girls!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

very niceWww@QuestionHome@Com