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"Glass World"

I've been living alone
In this glass world
I've created myself

But I care for it too much
And I fear that it will break
I'm afraid of making something I can not replace

Now it is shattering
This bliss has lasted too long
To see the light of day burns my eyes

I realize just how lonely I have been
Watching as others pass by
Analyzing their lives

But never understanding
A human emotion
I feel alive for the first time

And I rather be deadWww@QuestionHome@Com

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It is an amazing and deep poem, the symbolism and imagery is striking!. It says something original and powerful, even though sad!. It makes me want to reach in and help!. so that shows it's a good work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's rather it be "But I rather be dead" after "I feel alive for the first time!." The 'and' just doesn't really make much sense in that context!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It has a disappointing ending!. Find something more upbeat, like rising from the ashes!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

very deep yet very good!!! it's fine the way it is!Www@QuestionHome@Com

You need a transition from bliss to doom

Why!? What!?Www@QuestionHome@Com