In these dark hours I am the evil not one can perceive,aside from the demented souls whom abide by me!.
Yea it just seems inncorrect grammer!. !. !. can you help me revise it, but still get the dark point across!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
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Position:Home>Poetry> Does this poem make sence? Can you help?Question: Does this poem make sence!? Can you help!? In these dark hours I am the evil not one can perceive,aside from the demented souls whom abide by me!.
Yea it just seems inncorrect grammer!. !. !. can you help me revise it, but still get the dark point across!?Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: In the dark hours, I am the evil none can perceive, Save for the demented souls, Abiding with me!. I hope that this is good enough editing to earn me 10 points ThanksWww@QuestionHome@Com These dark hours show I am evil!. Perceived by no one, save the demented souls!.!.!. who abide with me!. (Just a tweak in a different direction!.)Www@QuestionHome@Com Perhaps expand on it a bit!?Www@QuestionHome@Com |