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Question: Please rate a poem i wrote on abuse!?
abuse poem!.!.!.!.!. HONEST OPINIONS
Sticks and stones
May break my bones
But words will always
Hurt me
The way you shout
Like I’m not there
I don’t know what its about
And frankly I don’t care
I just want the screaming
And yelling to cease
My brain is streaming
I fall to my knees
And beg that god
Can save my family
I start to sob
My mom is leaving
Now I am stuck in te midst
Of punches near me
Each blow hits
I wish he would see
Through the haste
Just cause he’s the one
Disposing the waste
Of anger on his son
I’m on the other end
Taking it as well as I can
My heart a mess
Alone now i standWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I think that you have done a good job writing this poem but if you are speaking about a personal experience and if there is any truth to what is said in your peom then I sure hope that you have someone to talk to!.!.!.
Keep it up you can only get better from here!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It's too conformist, you can obviously tell the reader never experienced any of this, or they wouldn't be as enthusiastic to be ryhming!. It's okay!.!.!. but not real!.!.!. abuse is a dark thing and this is just too much like the commercials they show to try to stop it, you get the general ideal but it's lacking something!.
3/10Www@QuestionHome@Com
That is a good poem, I just hope it isn't something you experienceWww@QuestionHome@Com
its a good poem but it makes me worriedWww@QuestionHome@Com