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Question: A poem for english!?
We're supposed to write a poem thing with phrases from chapter 4 of Night!. I didn't have the book, but my friend wrote down a lot of phrases!. Here is what i got:
I was angry with him,
The sad eyed angel
I did not feel and pity for him
As the Kapo took his time with the strokes of the whip
One, two!.!.!.
He let out a terrible cry
I was ever pleased
All eyes were on the child
As his eyes gleamed,
Empty and dead
I burst into laughter!.
This is what concentration camp had made of me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I was good until the "burst into laughter" part!. Makes you sound a bit sadistic really !.!.!. and really changed the tone on me!. Otherwise, it's a pretty sound poem and I like the last line a lot!. I'm just wondering if there's a different way of saying the laughter part while keeping with the rest of the poem's tone!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It has a good start but you need to redo the ending a bit it kind of
looses the point towards the ending in needs to be a bit more consistentWww@QuestionHome@Com
correction :D -
as his eyes gleamed red
empty and dead
it's a good poem!. i dont usually take to ones that dont rhyme but i like it anyway!. good job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
the book was sad and sucked and we had to do the same thing and your's is much better than mine!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Empty and dead seem out of place, but i dont know of the material your basing this on!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It looks like to me you have your poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com