Ok, here's a quick "Moms Day" write, care to comment and or crit?

Question: Ok, here's a quick "Moms Day" write, care to comment and or crit!?

Piercing silence
the kettle screams out
the smell of bacon fills the house
It is Mothers Day once again

Stretching, I toss back the covers
rose petals slide to the floor
I brush my hair to look pleasant
(there will be company soon)

One child enters the room
followed by another to fluff my pillows
Juice kisses on the cheek
A big smiling, toothless "Happy Mothers Day!!!"Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

The love of a child is the best gift of allWww@QuestionHome@Com

Po3tic Mistress
this mother's day poem is beautiful
I like how the family gets together
to honor mom on her day
also how you would get out of bed
and to look nice for her!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very good!.!.!.!.!.!.Very Good!!!!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it
it's a great poem for
all the mother's out there
on mother's dayWww@QuestionHome@Com

What do the young ones have to give, but the greatest gift of all!. Free unconditional love!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very sweet!. It will probably remind many moms out there of the little gifts of the heart from their kids on Mother's Day!.Www@QuestionHome@Com