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Question: (comical paranioa) a revision from 2005, care to give a fellow~ette poem some crit!?
The Crack In The Door




That crack in the door
I’ve seen it before
In fact
Its there everyday
So dark and deep
I should know it
completely
I just want it to go away!

I sleep now at night
With one eye open
Pondering
what’s beyond in the door
I hear all the thumping
The grumbling
The bumping
The whispers
The tapping
The constant rap rapping
I just wonder who Who is behind this
What do they see
When they’re looking at me!?

I wake in the morning
No shower for days
Not even a shave I can do!
I sit in my chair
Always aware
that the crack in the door
Is still there!

I lost my job!
My wife has left!
It has something to do
with the crack I bet!

I need the courage
The courage to merge
Up next to the crack in the door
I slowly start walking
The voices are mocking
“You’ll never know what we’re here for!”

I pick up the poker
And get even closer
To the door with a G*d awful crack
I raise up the tool
To plunge it straight through
With one horrendous whack!Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Good story in verse!!! Shades of the Twilight Zone here! Uh, why hasn't he showered or shaved for days!.!.!.!.and, uh, why the loss of job and wife!.!.!.!.!.psychological thriller!!!
Who's got problems!.!.!.him, the door, or me, the reader!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Paranioia running amuck, a few more days should see 3 cracks in the door!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well done - Sometimes we lose all we have because of anxiety and worry - if we do not meet challenges with courage - we tend to add to our furyWww@QuestionHome@Com

I'm getting a huge "Yellow Wallpaper" vibe, and that makes this awesome!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i kinda like it, it flows well but it seems to be missing some snap!Www@QuestionHome@Com