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Question: LOL, just found this going through my folders, I was 11, care to comment or crit!?
Magic Mountain
I have a vision that’s full of life
Its peak of white
so full and abrupt
So mysteriously out spoken
And the ledges so dismal
Ledges that flourish their dread
Ledges that can
turn man to coward
Yet soaring bird gloat
Birds in their splendor of rainbows
Releasing
the sounds of dance
Be still
The trees
Unless the wind furies
amongst the leaves
Swaying limbs
bring smiles as they seem
to wave 'hi"
A last!.!.!.
The sunset, so magical
Like natures theater come to close
Yet still behind the curtains of darkness
Awaits another showWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Yes you did
there is some nature
put in this poem!.
It talks about the mountain
I like the line of the sunset
and it being magical
its magically beautiful
There is also talk of animals
like a goat!.
A rainbow releasing its beauty
of the colors!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Quite good for 11!.
Quite good for 31!.
Well written for any age!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Damn!. I give up, no more writing!. 11 looked like hell to me!.!.!.maybe it was, either way, I didn't write poetry then!.!.!.for good reason!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Bravo!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Whoa, you were only 11!? That's seriously good, I can't write like that and I'm 13!. =)Www@QuestionHome@Com