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Question: I had to make 2 poems is this one ok to!?
The theme of the reading is love


I feel so alive with you
You make me feel like Im a godess
Sometimes I just call you to hear your voice
You help me with my problems
and
Man, the way smile is unbelivable
I wanna see you everyday
but i cant
because your moving away
I love you like no other in the world
You are the first guy I have ever Fallen inlove with
To sum it all up
I Love You
Its true


i worte this and i am only a 11 years old about to turn 12 august 2nd is it good
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
a!. Get rid of the 'Man' in the sixth line, it disrupts the flow!.
b!. It's 'want to' not 'wanna' - poems look better when they're written properly!.

But yeah, it's a good poem, and happy birthday for August 2nd :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

yeah it sounds goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

i like it! pretty good work for an 11 year old!. Good jobWww@QuestionHome@Com