Is this poem ok? Im doing a poetry reading tomorrow.?

Question: Is this poem ok!? Im doing a poetry reading tomorrow!.!?

The way you make me laugh is unforgetable
The way you talk is like magic
I love you
and I hope you know without a sound
that you are my knight and shining armor
iloveyou a million timesWww@QuestionHome@Com

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The first line is like memories
because the way you make me laugh
is unforgetable
It also talks about love
I hope you know from my heart
that you are my knight in shining armor
I think you will knock them out good
with your poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Honestly, I feel like it's a little cliche, and you haven't really captured the essence of love!.

Is this the way you feel about someone!? Really dig deep, just write down some adjectives about how they make you feel and try and create some lines!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Thats amazing!
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Pretty good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's superdo and i like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

did you make that yourself cos if yu did its very good poem!Www@QuestionHome@Com

pretty goodWww@QuestionHome@Com