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Question: I had one more in me!. How can I improve my Acrostic Sonnet!?
REMEMBER WHEN
Journey with me back to a time and place,
Underlying feelings became so real!.
Sleep on, my heart, and freeze frame on that face!.
Tell me again what it was like to feel!.
Listen once again to that haunting voice,
Instead of those dark words of reason!.
Kindred souls are still punished by that chioce,
Evincing their love, committing treason!.
Hold tight to the memory of that day,
Eternally scarred by my deception!.
Abandon the truth, hear what I say,
Vacate, my love, lost in your perception!.
Everything that I did, I did for you,
Not the best thing, but the right one to do!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
There is so much truth in these lines!.!.!.in that last line especially!. And there is so much meaningful beauty in these lines as well, a painful, remarkable beauty in such lines as
"Evincing their love, committing treason" and
"Eternally scarred by my deception" !.
I am so thrilled that you wrote another acrostic sonnet!. They all leave me in awe of your skill and compassion!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
whoa!. that is good!. i dont think you need to do anything to it!. it is quite lovley!. i like how it has a dark sence to it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
All Hail Queen Eva!
Beautiful Acrostic sonnet!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Check spelling - "chioce"!. Oh love - we are so blinded!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
There's tha genius again!
Lovely!. Don't change it!
Your beer is waiting in the fridge!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
You are truly an artist!Www@QuestionHome@Com