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Question: AbAbAb poeam type please rate!.!?
Sorry:
I'm sorry that i'm not tall
I'm sorry that i also enjoy the fall
I'm sorry that my hair isn't a shimmering golden blond
I'm sorry that of you i am fond
You don't enjoy the rain
When i tell you my goals in life you act as if i'm insane
Why do you expect me to be someone other than myself!?
Like i was supposed to put my way of life on a shelf!.!.
I'm sorry that you "love" me so
I'm sorry but if you want me to change i have to let you go
You said you would never hurt me
But little do you know when you ask me to change It leaves me torn inside
Leaving me to feel estranged
You're not in love with me, just the idea of control
I'm sorry but you're just going to have to go!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Often when we write a poem from personal experience no matter how the emotion is expressed, the rhyme will become forced by trying to find a word that fits a format!. This is why poetry is so difficult and why so many people end up just doing free verse!. You started with AAbb AAbb AA and then it becomes free verse but has a nice word echo, change estranged!.
Dont give up!. I think what you are writing is the most difficult style of poetry!. Something the classic poets like Shakespeare sought!. Please read my last two under "2 more to judge" and you will see what I mean!. The poem may be loaded with personal meaning but it becomes difficult for the casual reader to understand!. Find a style you like and develop it!. It does not matter what style or better develop your own!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
very nice!!!!!!!! this type of poem is truly found from the soul!. U probaly just broke up!. If so, hes a jerk 4 leaving u! great poem!. I think its aa bb type though! <3
-xoxo kathyWww@QuestionHome@Com
its rlly good!. but its an aabb poem!.
not abababWww@QuestionHome@Com
The rhyming is sooo forced!. I'm sorry but it just does not fit right!. "I'm sorry that I'm not tall !.!.!. I'm sorry that I also enjoy the fall"!? It seriously detracts from the meaning, because you're trying so hard with the rhyming that you're throwing the point aside just to find words that fit!. That's the major negative!.
The second problem is that parts don't flow !.!. you go from having very short sentences to very long sentences, which is okay when used only a little, but when used too much it just starts to sound awkward!.
Last problem : The last stanza, you completely threw out the rhyme scheme!? If you tried so hard to maintain it the whole poem, don't lose it at the end! If I were you I would rewrite that part so that the rhyming could remain constant throughout!. :]
I'm sorry but it's not the best, it needs some work!. But if you try hard enough you CAN make something of it so don't give up yet! Keep writing :]Www@QuestionHome@Com