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Question: And where is your pet tonight!?
Coyote Blues
The trickster sings calling all
to come join its hunting time!.
While man may rule jungles stone
coyotes will hunt, matters not where
For as urban sprawl spreads tentacles
those who retreat live not for long,
but those who hunt sing their songs!.
Fresh meat always scents nighttime air
Lambs know not their own damnation
for hunters live upon their gifts
Urban altars proffer wondrous gifts
while sirens sound and screams regale
As mornings brings the sounds of blue
and losses counted bring cries for help
the coyotes nestle, sated and calm,
till evening lights awaken scents
So sing the blues if you wish it so
but hear the echoes of the hunters wail!.
You may walk this land but pay you will,
for hunters will shadow you now and ever!.
And sing coyote blues!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This has echoes of Gotham City!.!.!.!.dark shadows, evil doings afoot, and killers on the loose!.!.!.!.!.when the sun comes up normality returns, but night will return, it always does and then beware!
Although this piece is 2lst Century the phrasing 'matters not where, live not for long, lambs know not etc!. give this a feel almost biblical!.!.!.!.!.which gives it a timeless quality!.
You know the line 'lambs know not!.!.!.!., would 'as' or 'while/whilst' or even 'when' hunters!.!.!.!. work better than 'for'!? !.!.!.!.and though this isn't a true rhyming poem!.!.!.having 'gifts' twice as end lines spoils this verse just slightly!.
Another suggestion - penultimate line - and ever, the full stop would be better if replaced by a dash or dotted lines creating a anticipatory pause (that's a big word for 6 am, Jill)
Marvellous imagery and nicely paced verses makes this a little gem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Eerily beautiful as I live out in the country (you must too!?)
They sure weren't howling yesterday as the tornadoes ripped through!.!.
Awesome work my friend <3Www@QuestionHome@Com
And the ancient hunters will live among us!. Coyote - adaptable for survival!. He hunts within the human jungle!. The prey is the same no matter what age - be it mouse or human child!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
That is really a fantastic poem and i really loved it a lot!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Yes, I wrote about this in a Euwaitian Converb!. Your poem says it much better!.Www@QuestionHome@Com