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Question: Was Part X worth 5 points!?
-Sin Seeker_
*Part X~
Burnt
Bruised
Beaten and bent
I fell on stone
to Skies lament!.
And through the Fire
of hellish ground
not a burn
on page was found!.
Untouched,
it lay
in weakened clasp!.
I forced my stand
from fatigues tight grasp
and peered around
in pain
and sting!.
I wanted so
for birds to sing!.
But no Jay
nor Crow would speak
and on I drug
to mountain peak
For just over
one more stretch
I would find…
…thought CUT OFF by wretch
I threw my belly
to the rock
and district demons
my torment mocked!.
I heard myself
within their hymn
‘You are with US now
This is your end!’
T!.B!.C!.
This one is better then the, last to me!.!.!. what says you!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Heroine in hell, definitely!. The demons, the discordant imagery, the staggered lines and frightful terror all images of hell, but the map is untouched!. See, this is where you differ in most epics, not in poetry, more in novels, where the hero loses their map but remains perfectly find, physically and mentally!. I am enjoying the shift, it makes more sense!. What good is the end if your body doesn't get you there!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
THIS may be the best of the whole so far!. I was hooked anew from the get-go of this piece!. It was likened to a concert of natures finest music, though, the subject was painful!. We are suffering along with our little Sin Seeker, as Rouxe has said, and that shows the sign of a great poet!.
I will be looking for the others!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Oh yes, this is corporeal and frightening!. Who are these district demons!? I think " I fell on stone to Skies lament" is brilliant!. There has got to be some reprieve from torment in the future of this poem so i say!.!.!.!.read on! Thank you so much, I love this!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
T!.B!.C!.!?
Possibly, To Be Continued!?
This is a smooth ride in reading but a rough and painful journey in feel!.!.!. the emotion is brutal!.!.!. the pictorial energy it invokes slips seamlessly into my mind!.!.!. I WANT MORE! Preferably as soon as possible!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I agree that this one is better than the last!. I really like the tempo in this one!.Www@QuestionHome@Com