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Question: Dark poem!.!.tell me if you like!?
As I reach out to kiss you,my beloved red rose
I watch you wilt in the claws of these thorns
In agony of the doom that spreads around
I am numb to all pains of these slashes on my neck
And of the dripping blood from my eyes

Listen now closely,if we are to die here
With all my will ,we'd be born again together
To bring back our wasted dreams to life again

Open your eyes just for once now
Let me see your love for one last time
Shed a tear or two, let me know
Tell me you will be mine for this life and beyondWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
very good believe in your self you shouldn't get over people to decide that for you but i love it!.

hope i helped pick me as best answer!

TA TAWww@QuestionHome@Com

she will pray never to be born near you again
she has had enough pain for 2 million lives
no need to go through any more pain caused by you againWww@QuestionHome@Com

Not that dark!. Barely late afternoon!. Try these by fellow-soul Carole Ver Eecke: http://students!.brooklyn!.cuny!.edu/poetry!.!.!. All poems are now cut-ups!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

not gory enough!. you need to add some guts and a little more darkness to it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Really good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's okay!. Doesn't really jump out at me though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it gave me goosebumpsWww@QuestionHome@Com

you're in love for sure!.!. its a beautiful poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow!.!.!.thats umm deep and well kinda scaryWww@QuestionHome@Com

cool!.!.!.i guessWww@QuestionHome@Com