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Wow! This is a spectacular poem! It's great, but I'll have to point out a few minor errors!. Here - I have rewritten your poem with the corrections (The places where I have corrected a mistake are in brackets):

No one will know but I

The many tears I cry, no one knows but I!.
The pain I feel in my soul(,) no one() knows it all!.
I lay my head down(,) I feel weak!.
I have lost any will to speak!.
My thoughts I think silently!.
No one needs to hear what I (bear)!.
Burdens upon me I can not express!.
I just appear to be like the rest!.
With feelings I must hide!.
The things I truly feel!.
Is left for me to heal!.
I can not bring (this) to (anyone)!.
It is all of my own!.
The pain may eventually show!.
As it continues to grow!.
When the time comes, I just might let (it) go!.
When I can't feel it (anymore)!.
When there (are) no more places to hide!.
I will step out()side!.
Till then I'll keep (it) all in()side!.
For the many tears I have cried!.
No will know but I!.

It is a lovely poem though, I just had to fix a few mistakes!. If I have made a false correction, you can keep it as is!. Some verses should be elaborated more to make it a bit easier to understand!. But great work, and I like how you really expressed a feeling thoroughly!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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i love it! that is exactly what I'm going through right now!. like at least once a week i cry at night when i go to bed!. you really inspire me and i needed this poem!. i myself express my self through poetry and writing!. Bravo, and Thanks!. I needed this!.

the only thing is, think about your spacing a little more!. you might want to start a new line in between some of them!.
Exmpl!.
The many tears I cry,no one knows but I!.

would be:

The many tears I cry,
no one knows but I!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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