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Question: A Poem - An Oldie - Is It A Goodie!?
Woven into the rhythm of my heart you dwell
Souls harmonize the angels song of one
Haven of love, sacred and blessed
The lyrics of rapturous delight of which they tell
Play the night and day of birth and rebirth
Joining and melting for the eternal
Alive in living the life of certainty
The cloth of splendor worn in perpetual mirth
Kaleidoscopic visions color the white of the soul
Love unfolding, holds the universe
Sharing the glory of ultimate joy
The multicolored array of oneness completes the wholeWww@QuestionHome@Com
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I like it!. The line I like is "Kaleidoscopic visions of color the white of the soul" This is a keeper!. Thanks for sharing!.
EDIT- The color white is all colors!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Oh yes, it is very good!. Your imagery is delightful!.
You begin with rhythm, harmony, and lyrics in stanza one -- the joy of music -- the dance of love!.
Next, you show the joy in uniting in love, and that when two become one, there are kaleidoscopic visions, that (like a prism) are displayed into the rainbows, yet return to the one white light!.
It is masterful!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Some great images!. To me it is ok, but not one of your usual stellar offerings!. But, many a time when I have been known to be wrong!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Very good!.!.!.
(But I would use psychedelic, rather than Kaleidoscopic!.!.!.just a suggestion!.!.!.seems to flow better better with that imagery!.!.!.)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Sigh!.!.!. I love your poems!. I agree though, that psychedelic would work better than kaleidoscopic!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I think it is fine the way it is!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I love this type of imagery, as well you know!. The first line is a superb image!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i love it!. kaleidoscopic seems a little out of place, but thats it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com